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Originally posted by @ponderableToo clever.
So we Need Drew to help us out here: Does this (the use of a private Name) constitute a relationship between Phil and Janine/Ginny ?
Originally posted by @ponderableI think, Ponderable, that we will have to guess or imagine what is likely to happen in this unlikely situation.
So we Need Drew to help us out here: Does this (the use of a private Name) constitute a relationship between Phil and Janine/Ginny ?
Originally posted by @ponderableHa ha, you’re as confused about the characters as I was writing it. 🙂 Neither of the men were
So we Need Drew to help us out here: Does this (the use of a private Name) constitute a relationship between Phil and Janine/Ginny ?
convincing enough to me; Mark was not the sort of man to have ever been unfaithful to his wife
and he was far too casual about his revelation of it. There was also far too much going on for an 800
word piece. I decided to make Trudi unfaithful to even out the score. The bit you didn’t comment on
was that Trudi was going to have another baby one way or another. That was the reason why Phil
suddenly decided to ditch her. He had NO plans for fatherhood. All three were equally deceitful to each
other. Ginny was the most genuine of them all and as for the different names for her? I guesse that Phil
really knew her a lot better than Mark. As for the title? It didn’t make much sense either.
I got the idea from recently listening to some Esther Perel lectures on YouTube. She specialises in
couples therapy and has an engaging, non judgemental way of explaining infidelity.
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A well told tale. Interesting idea, that a teenager?twen? will only communicate via emojis. Especially with the emotional pleading of the mother it is hard to believe that any sane person could leave it by sending emojis.
Though a good contestant, which didn't make the cut for me personnally. But maybe this is becaiuse I am an old man 😉
Originally posted by @drewnogalThank you Drew, there are many ways this story could go with a little imagination. In the meantime I will have a look at the link you attached.
Ha ha, you’re as confused about the characters as I was writing it. 🙂 Neither of the men were
convincing enough to me; Mark was not the sort of man to have ever been unfaithful to his wife
and he was far too casual about his revelation of it. There was also far too much going on for an 800
word piece. I decided to make Trudi unfaithful to even out ...[text shortened]... has an engaging, non judgemental way of explaining infidelity.
https://youtu.be/BH3c3vAgJvg
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Originally posted by @ponderableI gave Emojis top marks. (Maybe because I'm a young man? ) 🙂
Comments on "Emojis"
A well told tale. Interesting idea, that a teenager?twen? will only communicate via emojis. Especially with the emotional pleading of the mother it is hard to believe that any sane person could leave it by sending emojis.
Though a good contestant, which didn't make the cut for me personnally. But maybe this is becaiuse I am an old man 😉
I loved the idea of the 'technology gap' between them and the discombobulation pesky Emojis can cause in communication for the uninitiated. I also found the idea interesting of the 'emotion behind the emoji' not being fully understood by the receiver. We frequently use them in a casual/superficial way, but sometimes they carry real punch and emotional meaning.
I can relate to the emoji story. I got my 18 yr old daughter an iPhone. I got one for myself after i kept getting unintelligile placeholders from her on my ancient not-smart phone.
She is teaching her old dad about WjatsApp groups and we are emojing every few days or so.
Now the 12 yr old is green with envy and is pulling out all the stops to get an iPhone too.
Originally posted by @drewnogalEsther Perel is indeed very interesting, she makes me think in a different way.
... I got the idea from recently listening to some Esther Perel lectures on YouTube. She specialises in couples therapy and has an engaging, non judgemental way of explaining infidelity.
https://youtu.be/BH3c3vAgJvg
Thank you, Drew.
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I had Lady Rancible ranked at #4.
It is very well-written. First-rate in creativity.
I suppose I'd hoped the conclusion would make a more of a statement.
Lady Rancible's prejudicial consternation over her daughter's potential betrothal to the pasha seemed to foreshadow it.
Indeed, the Colonel's telegram was an unexpected ending.
But, for me, it might have been more satisfying if he'd revealed he was engaged to Singh's daughter. 🙂
Originally posted by @wolfe63Singh's daughter, hmmm, interesting twist. There had to be some twist. Obviously the colonel cannot accept the lady's proposal, and his refusal must be absolutely iron-clad, not merely that he does not happen to fancy the lass. Lady R must be left to drown in her conniving and consternation, one way or another.
I had Lady Rancible ranked at #4.
It is very well-written. First-rate in creativity.
I suppose I'd hoped the conclusion would make a more of a statement.
Lady Rancible's prejudicial consternation over her daughter's potential betrothal to the pasha seemed to foreshadow it.
Indeed, the Colonel's telegram was an unexpected ending.
But, for me, it might have been more satisfying if he'd revealed he was engaged to Singh's daughter. 🙂
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A moving tale, and also a well written Piece wrthy of the competition. It evoked emotions rather than describing them.
Probably one could make a whole novel from the concept offered. (I know about the word limit, but a few more Details would have probably made the piece occur in my voting list.)
Originally posted by @ponderableI liked it too. They were all good and we had to choose...
Comments on Police Reports:
A moving tale, and also a well written Piece wrthy of the competition. It evoked emotions rather than describing them.
Probably one could make a whole novel from the concept offered. (I know about the word limit, but a few more Details would have probably made the piece occur in my voting list.)