27 Apr 05
Originally posted by Starrman1) Well thought out, methodical and bleak, the sort of thing I imagine a killer would think of. Good attention to detail and the detachment of the conscious mind in submission of some subconscious controller is well thought through.
1)Under cover of night
2)Nameless... Faceless
3)Voodoo Hoodoo
2) Very good use of language, the rules are written in a style removed from that of the lead character and this is very important. The more poetical lilt to his death captures the benefit of release from pain. Mature and well constructed.
3) Amusing, short and effective, no great use of language, but I think it works anyway. I'd have liked to have seen more factual knowledge of voodoo presented, but this isn't essential. Also some development of the characters outside the situation may have proved beneficial.
All in all, a good amount of work from everyone involved. I would have put 'No Salvation' higher, but it exceeded the word limit and I'm a stickler for being able to write within the parameters set to you, this in itself is a skill not to be overlooked. Well done everyone 🙂
27 Apr 05
1. Voodoo Hoodoo .. Purely because I like light lyrical english style dialogue ...not that I can talk proper 🙂 Should have been longer.
2. Nameless... Faceless .. hit a spot I can't scratch ..
3. Under Cover of the Night .. Dark velvet.. well written Nasty.
No salv... too many words for comp but i liked it better than undercover ..more substance
Fight .. disjointed.. a chunk from something but fun