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CHAOS GHOST!!!

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ENTRY 4

"
Doc S: Drop tha beat, one two three four
Sheep: Who's dat Wolf blowin' down tha door,
Sheep: Huffin' and puffin' like he's got a grudge?
Doc S: Oh, snap, I think tha door's startin' to budge!

Doc S: Fo' rizzle my shizzle, and I'm bringin' tha shears
Doc S: I'm that Wolf that be causin' all yo' fears
Sheep: Baa! Baa! You'll never get in!
Sheep: Not by the white hairs on my chin.

Sheep: Plus we got you banned, you have to keep out!
Doc S: I'm a blow once more, you better watch out
Doc S: Whoosh! Whoosh! Now here I come
Sheep: Baa! Baa! Come, flock, let's run!

Doc S: Not so fast my fluffy friend
Sheep: Oh, please don't Doc, don't shear me again
Sheep: I'll tell you what, let's make a deal
Sheep: If I can keep my hair, then I won't squeal

Sheep: I won't complain and get you banned
Doc S: OK, deal. Now shake my hand
Sheep: Thank you, Doc, now friends we'll be
Sheep: From now throughout eternity

What happened then can only be
Called an act of cruelty
The Wolf took his hoof, as if to shake
And threw the sheep into the lake.

He howled and howled with great delight
Doc S: We'll meet again and surely fight
Sheep: Not if I get you banned again!
And the Wolf stalked off, back to his den."

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can I still enter? pleeeeease? (Not that I have anything yet)

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Originally posted by angie88
can I still enter? pleeeeease? (Not that I have anything yet)
Yes. Until 30 April.

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Originally posted by royalchicken
Yes. Until 30 April.
wooohooo! I sure know what I'm gonna be doing in my politics lesson tomorrow 😀
Seriously, this just about made my day... now all I need to do is win a game of chess... maybe it would help if I moved in some of my games. Gotta run now, but I'll be working on my submission tomorrow.... I wanna win the friggin thing ;P

Angie 😀

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Originally posted by angie88
wooohooo! I sure know what I'm gonna be doing in my politics lesson tomorrow 😀
Seriously, this just about made my day... now all I need to do is win a game of chess... maybe it would help if I moved in some of my games. Gotta run now, but I'll be working on my submission tomorrow.... I wanna win the friggin thing ;P

Angie 😀
If the decision procedure were less democratic, be assured that the judge could be bribed with one of your goodnight kisses 😉.

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I must go down to the beach again, to the lonely sea and the sky;

I left my shoes and socks there - I wonder if they're dry?

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Originally posted by Bowmann
I must go down to the sea again, to the lonely sea and the sky;

I left my shoes and socks there - I wonder if they're dry?
Please make your entries using the correct procedure.

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Entry 5

"Zodiac



Sick of living

Unwilling to die

Here is a cypher:



Bates had to die

And there will be more.



A golf course in Vallejo

Not near Lake Herman

Western brand ammo

Ten shots fired



Here is a cypher:

The boy was on his back

His knees to the car



I shall be very happy

To supply some more

Material



Here is a cypher:

You will find my name

In there"

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The eyes of truth

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eep

Let's get some more entries in here people. I'm not looking forward to the venerable ogden nash award going to the wanking machine.

Nyxie



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Originally posted by Someone who knows who they are
A fruit so bittersweet, it tasted like logic burnt,
The process leaves me cold, but the curse it carries me,
comforting me through the ages
of passage
As I carry the seed

Deep down inside I know,
The answers ...[text shortened]... ry rough first draft, and my entry to our competition.





I like it, but the idea of the competition is for submissions to be anonymous. It would be a terrible shame to not have this one in, so I'm going to post it and then alert your post. Since you say it is a first draft, be aware that you can email me the final one any time before 30 April. All the submissions will be reposted together then anyway.

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ENTRY 6 (first draft)

"A fruit so bittersweet, it tasted like logic burnt,
The process leaves me cold, but the curse it carries me,
comforting me through the ages
of passage
As I carry the seed

Deep down inside I know,
The answers are always easy to the questions you ask,
But why do I look at you when you look at me,
and
You ask me why I bleed

Through the ages we've
passed it down, never holding it ourselves, because,
because the thought of it makes us, it defines us
it's us
and yet we still deny

The terrified shrieks they haunt me,
They consume my dreams, images so vivid
so startling that I cannot bear to think I'm the cause
and still
You ask me why I cry

Together we have brought ourselves to this
to a struggle we may not win, only slowly do we realize
our understanding is our curse, it's the path we chose
you and I
though we cannot fathom why

Does he carry your curse? The one I hold?
the innocence leaves him by the day, you say,
You say he carries your name, does he also carry the blame?
I say
I think we should not lie

Together we shall take him, by the hand
through this land, from others who would taint him,
I take him, slowly I bring to him the understanding
though I wish
I wish I could leave him be

He looks up to us, wanting what we have,
in his heart he slowly comes to know us, and we him
though better off we left him, as he was, like we were
before the time
the time I knew to cry"

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ENTRY 7

"
The Astral Sonnet

I am a seer of beautiful things;
hate and sorrow and the pleasure of pain
I am the possessor of angel's wings;
feathered emotion on which I have lain
Though joy may hunt me and living stings,
its ageing sunset with practice feigns
and tricks me with the song it sings;
its wailing verse and curt refrains
I glimpse the lives of countless kings,
the struggle of their solar reigns

But now have I seen all I can sustain,
the task and the endless duty it brings
With celestial abandon I move from this plane,
the tangled skein to which life clings.
My heart is tired, its rhythm wanes,
my spirit, in universal resonance, rings"

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ENTRY 8

"TIGER TIGER BURNING BRITE IN THE FORREST OF THE NIGHT
WHAT IMORTEL HAND OR EYE COULD FRAIM THY FEARFUL SIMMETRY?"

rwingett
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Originally posted by royalchicken
ENTRY 8

"TIGER TIGER BURNING BRITE IN THE FORREST OF THE NIGHT
WHAT IMORTEL HAND OR EYE COULD FRAIM THY FEARFUL SIMMETRY?"
Entry 8 is clearly a plagiarism. Why was it allowed to enter? It's taken from a poem by William Blake.

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Originally posted by rwingett
Entry 8 is clearly a plagiarism. Why was it allowed to enter? It's taken from a poem by William Blake.
I think it's a joke, based on the BIG CATS antics of late. Please note both the spelling and caps lock indicators. Here is the original:

Tiger, tiger, burning bright
In the forests of the night,
What immortal hand or eye
Could frame thy fearful symmetry?

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